If Only...
* Published in the Asian Age Poetry Contest on Jan 6, 2008
She peeps from behind the moon,
Her dark mane flows free.
Can I get out to see?
Dark streets. That lustful, brutal eye.
Virgin skin under your frills.
Look at your bosoms, do I lie?
Skimming the openness, letting an elated cry.
Soft breeze ruffling nightingale’s down.
Can I pedal off and fly?
Behind iron bars lies your empire,
This vast prison grants freedom.
Beyond, don’t you dare aspire.
Are binding bangles a must?
I am owned it says. It grows on me.
Vermillion camouflages the inner rebellion.
Oh! If only your questions had answers.
But no one ever answered me!
_
Her dark mane flows free.
Can I get out to see?
Dark streets. That lustful, brutal eye.
Virgin skin under your frills.
Look at your bosoms, do I lie?
Skimming the openness, letting an elated cry.
Soft breeze ruffling nightingale’s down.
Can I pedal off and fly?
Behind iron bars lies your empire,
This vast prison grants freedom.
Beyond, don’t you dare aspire.
Are binding bangles a must?
I am owned it says. It grows on me.
Vermillion camouflages the inner rebellion.
Oh! If only your questions had answers.
But no one ever answered me!
_
Labels:
reflective poetry
7 comments:
Am not much of a critic. But still then, hmm the expression of the bride is beautiful to say the least.
Hmm.
Later.
doesnt really talk about any bride!...what made u think so?...thou yeah..its rather abt women :)
thanx for being here newayz...i loved ur blog...a breather in this squabble of blogs
Hey you are from bbsr........thats so cool, you write really well. Sorry cant comment on this piece coz when it comes to poetry, i am as good as Dino Morea is at acting.
Err..
Which blog of mine are you talking about?
Never mind. They are crap, all of them.
Well, the poem isnt really clear upon if its a married woman or not, but the last few lines did project so, hence.
In any case, good work.
Later
Hi,
I am a friend of mamun (reema dash) and was reading your poem. Nice. A constructive suggestion - how will : "..free off and fly.." sound than "..pedal off and fly.."
Its just a trivial suggestion, but might make your poem on a married woman's life sound different. do lemme know.
Cheers.
thanx for being so kind to spare sum time ....after all u r a big name..as Reema has said me....will surely answr ur questions...just hold on ;)
is it really you or your alter igo in limbo.
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